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Nowadays many people choose to be self employed rather than to work for a company or organisation Why might this be the case What could be the disadvantages of being self employed

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In
this
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 contemporary era,
instead
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 of working under a firm, the majority of
people
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 prefer to start their own
business
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.
This
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 essay shall discuss the reasons behind it and
expected
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 consequences of being
self employed
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self-employed
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.
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 with, today's generation
choose
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 to
work
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 for themselves rather than employed under any organisations. As
,
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 there are several reasons for
this
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 changed  attitude towards employment.
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 of all, due to the advancement of technology,
people
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has
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 more opportunities than in the past to choose their mode of
work
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.
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,
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 generation has less patience than that of
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.
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, those who
work
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 in
the
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apply
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multinational companies or in
the
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apply
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high-profile jobs, are threatened to meet the deadlines by the end of the month.
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result
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 it develops anxiety and stress among the employees and they are forced to leave the
job
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.
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Finally
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 the employees are not allowed to take
day
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a day
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 off
work
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 even if it is an emergency unless the boss gives permission.
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, they end up developing hatred towards their unsatisfactory jobs. While
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people
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 find it satisfactory to
work
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 as their own boss. Because
,
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 they are not obliged to meet deadlines or listen to the insult from higher authority.
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, they can take
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leave whenever they want.
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, even if being the master of self is not free from cons
such
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 as
,
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 financial insecurity, lack of
job
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security
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, failure of
starts ups
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starts-ups
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 and stress of being a
multi tasker
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multi-tasker
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. In fact,
people
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 do not realise the consequences of their own
business
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 until they start it. The prime disadvantage is that
,
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 the one who runs the
business
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 should know the art of multitasking
,
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 if he/she does not have enough to employ
staffs
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. In
the
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this
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 situation, they are compelled to do the roles of manager, accountant and so on.
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Similarly
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 the
job
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security
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 is not
also
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upto
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up to
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mark
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 asas
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 the
job
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security
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 is not
also
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upto
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up to
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mark
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 asas
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 the
job
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security
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 is not
also
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upto
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up to
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mark
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 as anytimeSimilarly, the
job
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security
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 is
also
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 not
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upto
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up to
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mark
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 as any time financial crisis can occur in a
business
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. To conclude, the disadvantages will outweigh the advantages if the self-proclaimed entrepreneur is not keen
at
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 multitasking. Whereas, one can reach the
Pinnacle
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pinnacle
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 of success if he/she masters in the act of self-employment
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