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The bar chart shows data about the amount of vehicle possession in China.
This
 information is about between 1987 and 1999. Overall, the statistic began to increase from 1987 to 1993 gradually, in addition the development realized from 1995 to 1999 sharply. The number of 1991 and 1993 years was relatively similar,
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 the high rate belonged to the 1993
year
 . On the one hand, the maximum show occurred in the 1999
year
 , in ,contrast happened in the 1987
year
.
Firstly
, the high rate of the pointer was shown with more 4000 than 4000 in 1999, on top of that only
year
 could skip both 3000 and 4000. The least level of the bar chart was estimated with almost 250 people in 1987. Another factor that must be paid attention the statistic of 1989 was approximately twice as much.
In addition
, the amount of 1995 quantity was almost just under 2000.
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