many people believe that the Internet is useful, but some argue that the Internet harms people. do you agree with this?

In the modern
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the
internet
is
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one of the most significant things for humanity.
However
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it has both positive and negative features.  
First
of all, the
internet
gives a shot for humanity to be a single whole, learn news from remote corners of the Earth, and gives an opportunity to earn some money. People find
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friend
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from all over the
world
, which makes them happier (and saves some
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lives
lifes
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). By inventing the
internet
, humanity
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also
paved their way to an
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endless
library of  knowledge accumulated and collected from all times and peoples.   All the same time, the greatest harm of the
internet
is the degradation of society.Allowing people to
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find
any information, the
internet
also
condemns them to the existence of permissiveness. A person becomes
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interested
uninterested
in the secrets of the universe and
world
discoveries.
Instead
, he
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either
rather
degrades by watching funny and meaningless videos, or does not understand what he wants, eventually
beeing
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being
himself in tons of absolutely unnecessary literature. The younger
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generation
does not see a special deterioration of the situation, because they were born in the age of technology and they have no opportunity to compare. While the older generation has
this
opportunity. And
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among
them, it is much more common to find people who are dissatisfied
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fact that their
childern
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children
and grandchildren have bogged down in the
internet
, not paying attention to the
world
around them.    In conclusion, the
internet
certainly gives us a shot to develop and introduce everything around,
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at the same time
this
powerful thing can draw in those who do not know how to properly handle it
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