Do you agree with the below statement ? A zoo serves no purpose.

It can be seen that
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enormous number of
zoos
are established around the globe.Various species can be seen by visiting
such
places.Safari gardens and
zoos
are very famous among visitors who love
animals
, birds and other creatures.Some people contend that
zoos
do not have exact purpose and others argue that it facilitates people to visit rare
animals
which could not be watched easily.In my view,
Zoos
contribute more negative
impact
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on
animals
compared to positive effects. Exhibit
animals
do not live in real habitats in the
zoo
or open park environments.Most of the
animals
or birds have to spend their whole life in cages or small spaces.Result
of
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it
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, they cannot behave as natural habitats they were in.
For example
, Elephants live as
flock
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, when they want to Choose
partner
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for
mateing
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mating
matting
, they consider many qualities of female partners.
Then
they try to move away from the flock and live alone for almost three months for their breeding purposes.
Such
freedom is not
not
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available in the
zoo
.
In addition
, food patterns are
also
affected due to
lack
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of resources.Though
zoos
are one of
tourist
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attractive
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spots,
it
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could not show true animal's
behaviorals
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behavioural
behaviour
behaviours
.Poor
maintaining
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, poor feeding can have spread clusters of diseases to them.
Therefore
, their life span has become short .
Zoos
and Safari gardens cannot earn a considerable sum of money concerning
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expenditures
which
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are allocated by
government
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for the maintenance.The main income of the
Zoo
comes from visitors,
However
, most of the animal parks keep some species who have
imported
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from other countries.Hens cool rooms, special treatments must provide to them.
Foe
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instant, Penguins native area is the coldest component of the world like
Antatica
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Antarctica
.If a
Zoo
wants to keep
such
birds in tropical countries
garden
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, they have to spend more money to adopt them.
However
, they do not have income by only selling tickets to travellers at the counters.
Therefore
it is
extra
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burden to the economy in poor countries certainly. In conclusion,
Zoo
is
the
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one of
tourists
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attractive destinations. People can
vist
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visit
and relax
mind
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by watching and taking
phots
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with beautiful wild
live
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.
In contrast
,
zoos
are not better places
animals
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to live. Maintaining cost and negative consequences can prove that the '
zoo
serves no
purpose'
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purpose
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.
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