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Underground Station passenger numbers in London. write anything

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The graph gives some data about the amount of Subway Station passengers in London. As well, the graph illustrates information
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time
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. Overall, passengers were their maximum number in the morning and in the evening,
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contrast
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 the least level occurred in
afternoon
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.
Firstly
,the statistic was relatively similar at 6 a.m and 16 a.m,
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 the least number was shown in the graph at 16:00 with just under than 100. On the one hand, the same situation was illustrated at 20:00 and 22:00.
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, the increase happened between at 6:00 and 8:00 sharply, the pointer equalled 400 passengers. After 8:00 to 16:00 fluctuated. The amount developed steadly
then
 16:00 to 18:00 and the index leveled off just less than 400. From 18:00 to 20:00 dropped from approximately 360 to 120 dramatically. Betwenn 20:00 and 22:00 the high rate index happened at 21:00 p.m, the number was almost just above 150.
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