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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.

#countries #money #poverty #aid
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It has been suggested that topic for discussion, more wealthy
countries
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 don'
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 assist once in a blue moon,
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however
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this
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 situation can'
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 solve
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 poorness so the support must be realized by progressed
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 more than financial aid. In my opinion, each
country
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 shouldn'
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 be forced to give various help and I have got some notions about on
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 matter.
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, as a matter of fact, there are more people in the growth
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 and the enactments had better enforced by the government for their nation.
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, we can see that both international and national contracts,declarations and some
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 in the legislation that each
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 is to help their folk. I believe that if
countries
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 commence (assist) with both financial and other enactments, they will not support their people and probably the crisis will establish in the
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 step by step,
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 as a pattern, maybe the tax will be increased.
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, in fact, recently, the condition has been changing always. I have read that from social media, there are some reasons. One of them, rich
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 can'
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 manage money, they share income for various
countries
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. My own view on
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 matter, money is to be saved by the government or they ought to spend more useful obligations for their
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. As far as I know,
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helping has been utilized by some
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 as a trade. For ,instance financial aid is being given by developing
countries
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 as a credit, afterwards poor
countries
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 should pay more than getting before. Briefly, the rising
country
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 shouldn'
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 be coerced
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 helping because it is necessary to consider
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country
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. Taking everything into consideration, each government can give a lot of money,
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nevertheless
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 the others mustn'
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wait
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 more because every
country
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 has got certain duties, obligations,plans and so on. The growth
countries
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 can'
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 enforce support constantly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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