Some people think that children can learn about history by visiting museums, while others feel that there are better ways to learn about history. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People have various opinions about whether visiting museums is more influential in acquiring knowledge about
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or that more effective methods are available for
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. On the one hand, the advocates of the
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view consider the benefits that visiting exhibitions
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,
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have the opportunity to see historical items in person, which could offer an accurate understanding
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past
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, by seeing old plates ,forks, spoons that are exhibited,
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could realize the ways that their ancestors had been eating food.
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, spectators could experience old-fashion lifestyles which could be truly attractive for
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and bring about learning those points immediately.
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, some exhibitions allow
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to wear historical clothes or spend time in places that are built like ancient structures. In doing so, visiting museums could teach valuable lessons about
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to
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. Others,
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, believe that other manners could be more effective
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learning
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like reading books or watching documentaries. Regarding reading books, almost all aspects of
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are explained in
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. Namely, structures, ceremonies, food, occupations, sanitation status and medicine. So,
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could figure out how ancient people had experiences life comprehensively. As far as documentaries are concerned, thanks to modern technology,
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movies are produced by animation producers, which clearly illustrate human beings of the past. These programs usually cover invaluable information and could be undoubtedly influential. Since
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could find out about not only the ambience of those eras
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but
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all items that were used.
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, other sources of data could be really worthwhile for learning
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due to their accuracy. I sit on the fence in
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regard.
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exhibitions have some undeniable upsides, books and documentaries contain compelling
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. I believe that using all of these categories simultaneously could
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learning
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more enjoyable and convenient. Whether museums or other ways are more practical for familiarizing
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with
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is debatable.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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