Full-time university students spend most of the time studying. They should be doing other activities too. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is said that
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should preserve the extinction of endangered
animals
from
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changes. I partly agree with
this
view because ecological balance and educating youngsters play a vital role. On the one hand, people face a variety of challenges when
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the extinction of
animals
from the natural environment.
Firstly
, the natural process has a long historical period that its impact on
animals
and
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. It is not only one generation to limit
this
process, but
also
many generations to complete it,
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that there are a lot of natural disasters
such
as tsunami,
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or
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which can not
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by
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human
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.
Secondly
, some
animals
need to adapt
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new nature to live better.
For example
, bears live in the south of
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its need to change colour hair and fatter to fight again the cold weather.
Therefore
, changing
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nature to protect endangered
animals
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difficulty
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On the other hand
, I believe that resiting
this
process to preserve animal
endangerd
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endangered
that bring some benefit to
human
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. The
innitial
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reason is that ecological balance is important. If any animal
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on the earth,
this
effect
negative
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on the food chain of other
animals
.
For instance
, human eat a lot of cats lead to mouse develop quickly and destroy crops.
Furthermore
, some human activities attribute to extinct animal species.
For instance
,
human
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cut down trees and deforestation lead to
animals
lost their
habitas
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habitat
habitats
habits
.
Consequently
, punishment these activities that help protect
animals
easier. In conclusion, while people have some problems deal with the extinction of
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, I believe that
protect
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to extinct
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special species can be implemented by
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human
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.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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