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although many people value their public parks such space could be better used for other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or develop business and boost economies. do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #value #parks #space #purposes #areas #population #business #economies
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there has been a debate that public parks
space
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 could be better used for other purposes
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 as residential areas or business places to boost economies. I strongly disagree with
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 because the world has become a very busy place already. there is no need of cutting down the few things human beings can be used for their pleasure. public parks are very important for any community to wind up after their busy day of life to go and do some exercise or meet a friend or just to sit and relax. ,
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 nowadays there are very few places has been left for
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 areas . each and every
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 was used to build giant companies .
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result
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 we can see that there are so many people
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 becoming mentally ill. they
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don't
 have any
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 to see humans everyone is living in a confined
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 and
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 they end up
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struggling
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that if there
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 any
possibily
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possibility
 governments should try to allocate more and more spaces for
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the public
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 to just relax not try to remove these
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