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Fossil fuels are essential for producing electricity, powering industry and fueling transportation. However, one day we will reach a point when all the world’s fossil fuels have been depleted. How can we conserve these resources? What are some alternatives to fossil fuels?

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Since the beginning of the industrial ,era fossil
fuel
 has become an important source of
powering
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. Even after 200 ,years the world is still depending heavily on fossil
fuel
.
However
, it is inevitable that reservoirs of fossil
fuel
 are soon to be depleted. To empower modern-day lifestyles people are heavily dependent on fossil fuels. Transportation, powering industries and generating electricity are the most demanding areas which are directly responsible for exhausting
fuel
 resources at an exponential rate. Mitigating the usage of fossil
fuel
 will not only benefit to preservation of the resource but
also
, will help to reduce emission and environmental pollution. Many developing countries are having the problem of motor traffic during the peak hours of the day which increase the consumption of
fuel
 for no reason. In developed countries
such
 as Singapore, they will consider uplifting public transportation so that the people have no necessary use of private vehicles for their daily transportation needs. ,
Moreover
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 the improvement in hybrid and electric car production is directly helping to lower crude oil consumption. In the bigger picture preserving will delay the unavoidable situation of running out of fossil
fuel
,
,
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nevertheless
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 it is time to find alternatives to the crude oil resource. Countries are working on finding other sustainable means to empower the need for
energy
. Nations are investing in researching and developing
energy
 production for
an
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instant, solar power, wind power and nuclear power in order to avoid the catastrophic situation of running out of fossil
fuel
 in the near future. In conclusion, fossil
fuel
 is a crucial
energy
 source in the
modern day
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.
However
, it is soon to be depleted. We need to find ways to preserve the remaining of the resource while looking for alternative options for sustainable
energy
 to empowering the world.
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