Tourism is an ever growing industry. What benefits do you think tourism brings to individuals and society?

Toursits
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Tourists
are travelling around the world and making
this
a
multi billion
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dollar industry which is increasingly growing
in
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a rapid pace. There are countless
advantgaes
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advantages
to both
society
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and as individuals.
This
essay will outline
those
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mertis
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merits
. To being with, Individuals can meet new people from
different
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ethnic
background
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.
This
will allow them to understand their
clutural
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cultural
culture
hertiage
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heritage
.
For instance
, people from America are more prone to travel to different
destination
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destinations
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comparing to others. Another aspect is
religous
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religious
,
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as
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an individual can learn about a
particluar
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particular
country
's traditional values. Which will help to
undersand
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understand
and respect each other.
For example
, when a person goes to a
HIndu
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Hindu
temple, he or she must remove their
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footwear
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footwears
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footwear
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at the entrance and
then
enter.
Moreover
, when a
country
experiences more
toursits
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tourists
, it will help the society to come up with various business ideas to meet new foreign investors.
Such
as, in
India
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many from western countries visit there and start up new businesses along with the locals.
This
concept will overall boost the economy and open
new
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door
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doors
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for the social norm. In conclusion, It is clear that
this
industry is a key factor as a
country
and as a person. Each
country
needs to invest more
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toursim
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tourism
and come with strategies to overcome obstacles.
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