Tourism is an ever growing industry. What benefits do you think tourism brings to individuals and society?

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are travelling around the world and making
this
a
multi billion
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dollar industry which is increasingly growing
in
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a rapid pace. There are countless
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to both
society
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and as individuals.
This
essay will outline
those
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mertis
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merits

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. To being with, Individuals can meet new people from
different
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ethnic
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.
This
will allow them to understand their
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cultural
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heritage

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.
For instance
, people from America are more prone to travel to different
destination
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comparing to others. Another aspect is
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,
where
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as
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an individual can learn about a
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country
's traditional values. Which will help to
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understand

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and respect each other.
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, when a person goes to a
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Hindu

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temple, he or she must remove their
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footwear

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at the entrance and
then
enter.
Moreover
, when a
country
experiences more
toursits
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tourists

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, it will help the society to come up with various business ideas to meet new foreign investors.
Such
as, in
India
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many from western countries visit there and start up new businesses along with the locals.
This
concept will overall boost the economy and open
new
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door
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for the social norm. In conclusion, It is clear that
this
industry is a key factor as a
country
and as a person. Each
country
needs to invest more
on
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toursim
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tourism

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and come with strategies to overcome obstacles.
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