‘For all children, the ability to play a musical instrument is just as important as the ability to read and write.’ How far do you agree with this suggestion? How important is it for a child to learn to play a musical instrument, in your view?

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the fact that each and every one of us

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should

know how to play at least one musical

instrument

However

, while the

ability

to play an

instrument

can provide some

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benefits

such

as improve concentration, increase creativity,etc, I do not agree with the idea that kids need to learn to play

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just like they learn

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and write.

First

of all, literacy is a necessary skill

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students

. Because literacy is the

first

and compulsory

subject

children

learn in school, from

this

skill

students

cam understand information coming from other subjects and develop themselves.

For example

, youngster

students

who do not have

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ability

can not learn literature so they will be lacking communication skills,

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expressing

opinions and persuasion.

Moreover

, reading and writing skill

also

affect their career.It is not the same as

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to play

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instrument

. Kids who can not play musical instruments still study well, develop other

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and get the job they want.

Furthermore

, not all

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students

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have a gift in

music

is not their cup of tea so it would be unfair to treat

music

as an essential

subject

. If

music

is included in the compulsory curriculum, it will be a burden on the

children

For example

children

with a talent for

music

will easily pass the requirements of the

subject

, but the rest of the

children

may feel pressured to try to practice something beyond their

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and feel inferior itself. In conclusion,

music

should still be an optional

subject

. Pupils should know play

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but it cannot be a measure of a child's

ability

, so it should not be considered as important as literacy.

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