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Many companies offer their employees the opportunity to work from home. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from home for the company.

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 pandemic has affected
world
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 significantly and
as a result
 of
this
 working remotely has become essential considering employee safety. While some people believe
this
 new normal is beneficial for organisations, others disagree.
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 situation. Every situation comes with
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 own advantages and disadvantages.
Similarly
, introduction to remote work has brought ample
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pros for workers who felt immense pressure while working in the office in
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 corporate environment. With
this
 new normal have become not only more productive but
also
 efficient
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and
 it has been observed in many organisations. Other than reduced stress
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, employees are getting extra time to involve themselves in activities to implement new strategies for
betterment
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 of
bussiness
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business
 as well as personal growth since they don't invest time in
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commute
.
On the other hand
, working remotely may create a major communication gap between teams.
Although
 there are various
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software
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team mates
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, sometimes due to technical issues
such
 as internet connectivity, many major discussions would get
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interrupted
.
Besides
this
, finding a balance between personal and professional life could be difficult since most
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people are living with family.
For example
, working women may find
this
 situation difficult since they will be doing all household chores as well as office duties. It could result
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 stretched working hours as well. In conclusion, remote work can be not only productive but
also
 rewarding for companies if they could find a balance by introducing certain programmes for employees which will enable them to perform at their best.
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