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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sum of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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world
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people
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 prefer
fastest
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the fastest
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transportation
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services
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.
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Train
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The train
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 is a faster public
transportation
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 vehicle and some
people
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 believe to spend more money to make more
railway
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lines
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 between
cities
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. Many
people
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 think
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improvement
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the improvement
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 in existing public
transportation
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. In my opinion, money should
be invest
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into
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improvement
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the improvement
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 of already existed public
transportation
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services
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. Trains are the best way to reach faster to the destination but, to make
railway
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lines
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 between
cities
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 it is very risky and it might be the cause of major accidents because of traffic and crowd of the
city
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.
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, to construct
railway
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lines
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trough
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through
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cities
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 it will be very
conjusted
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confused
congested
conjured
.
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, Mumbai is one of the busiest
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city
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cities
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 in the world and there are many
railway
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lines
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 in between the
city
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 and
people
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 experienced very
inconvinient
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inconvenient
idea
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 to make
railway
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lines
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throgh
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through
 the
city
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. Because,
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city
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the city
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 is already very crowded and it has many tourist spots so, hordes of tourists visit there every year. Mumbai
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also
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is also
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 called
as
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a
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 dream
city
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 so many come for
seaching
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searching
teaching
 jobs and almost all the giant companies are in the middle of the
city
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.
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Train
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The train
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 station and
railway
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lines
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also
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takes
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 more space so it is very uncomfortable for every
people
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.
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, other public
transportation
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services
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works
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 properly and professionally it will be so relaxing for everyone.
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, buses are so
convinient
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convenient
 and comfortable because buses can run on the same road and
it
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 can stop everywhere so
people
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 can get
in
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on
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 the
bus
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 and get off the
bus
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 from anywhere.
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, they do not have to take another auto to drop
to
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at
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 the
train
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 station and
then
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train
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totrain
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 drop them to the destination it seems exhausted.
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Bus
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The bus
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 can pick up from home and drop directly the destination and it is possible only by investing more money and
improvement
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 into the
bus
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 service. In conclusion, trains for
long
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the long
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 journey will definitely
makes
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 sense but
railway
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lines
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 between
cities
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 it is very lengthy and hectic for
people
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. Government should make sensible
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improvement
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improvements
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in
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to
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 the existing public
transportation
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services
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.
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