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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

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The relationship between
parents
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 and
child
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 is one that takes care of the physical, emotional and social development of the
child
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. It’s a unique bond that every
parent
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 and
child
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 can enjoy.
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 lays the foundation for the overall
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 of a
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 and the life choices that he/she makes. So I think it is indeed a good idea to teach every young person
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how to be a good
parent
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school. The essay formulated below provides key reasons as to why it is essential to teach youngsters to become good
parents
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 , to maintain a positive relationship with the
child
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 and to the skills needed to become a good
parent
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. In today’s
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 we observe that many
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-
child
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 relationships are not very favourable.
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 main reason for
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 is due to misunderstandings between the
parent
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 and
children
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,
maybe
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 due to the age difference or other issues. A
parent
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 would never do something or
take
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 a decision that would hurt their
children
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. So it is essential that every individual from younger days learns the skills and qualities of becoming a perfect
parent
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 so that they understand how their
parents
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 bring them up. Knowing all of these facts and experiences from a younger age will help them to understand their
children
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 better
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 strengthening the bond
parent
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-
child
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 bond. To be a good
parent
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, every person should be loving, affectionate and understanding to others. A
parent
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 needs to be a good role model as the
children
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 will look up to them. The required time and care
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 to be provided to
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children
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 of all ages. The
parents
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 should
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good
listener
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 and should set up ground rules to build up the
behavior
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 of their
children
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. In conclusion, it is of utmost importance that young persons are taught to be affectionate and devoted
parents
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 from early days.
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