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the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.

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The table gives some data about the selling at a small restaurant in a business area. As well,
this
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 table illustrates the date from October 7 to 13 and the statistic of
lunch
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 and dinner. Overall, the pointer of dinner was better than the index of
lunch
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. The least amount of all occurred on
Sunday
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, in ,contrast most of all happened on
Friday
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.
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, the least number belonged on
Sunday
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 with 1550
dollars
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, in , add the indexes of Tuesday and Wednesday were relatively similar the pointer of Thursday,
,
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apply
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nevertheless
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 the high rate belonged to Tuesday and Wednesday with 3850
dollars
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. Generally, the maximum show was appreciated on
Friday
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 with 4350
dollars
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.
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, the shows dropping from 4350
dollars
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 to 2450
dollars
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 (between)from
Friday
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 to
Sunday
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. What is more, the minimum show of the dinner belonged to
Sunday
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 with 2450
dollars
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.
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, the statistics of the
lunch
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 on Monday, Tuesday and
Friday
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 were relatively similar. The maximum number of the
lunch
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 belonged to Wednesday with 2595
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