Some People say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or Disagree?

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environment exist
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points of view about topics and curriculums developed in educational institutes.
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believe that memory knowledge is most important
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practical
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is the reason some times education is spending more time teaching facts to their
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with the idea that schools are given
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importance to developed practical
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, since primary education
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children are studying facts. In most
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schools
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the curriculum are designed to
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the capacity to memorize and learn all the topics relative
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maths, science, physics, chemistry, etc.
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have 5 hours per
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for maths, 5 hours per
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for science and only 1 hour per
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for sports, 1 hour per
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area.
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and universities are ignoring the importance of developing life
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finish their course they have to be prepared to face different situations
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society and they have to know how
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practical situations during their working life.
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, for
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is most important to know how to make a wooden table with their hands that to know the whole theory about the origin and compounds of the wood. To conclude, in my
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the educational system has to
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change has to be thinking about preparing
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for life, preparing
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with
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will help them survive in different
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environments
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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