Some people think that inorder to deal with the problem of congestion in cities, privately owned vehicle should be barred in city centres while others consider this to be an realistic solution.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Overcrowding in the cities is a major problem which the society feel that,for a permanent solution to be met,the
privately owned
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automobile should be barricaded from the city centre while others contemplate
this
to be
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solution.In
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will elaborate on both views and provide my opinion
Firstly
,overcrowding in cities is a major problem globally.
In addition
,it is certain that less carbon emission and exhaust fumes would tremendously reduce,which is contributing heavily towards climate change,and
also
there will
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air quality.
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,40% of
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in United kingdom has barricaded all privately owned automobile in the city which has contributed to the country
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in terms
of health.
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satisfaction and a smash hit towards
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society
Secondly
, commuting will take longer
thus
it will challenging in areas with poor public transport.Indeed there will be overcrowding in public transport terminals.Diseases will spread very fast and with
this
,the hospital bills will escalate
as a result
of many people getting unwell .Quite often you will find people taking advantage of the situation.
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,a survey done by the ministry of transport shows that 90% of people would lead to time trouble without
this
type of automobile.
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this
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of efficiency in our daily activity. In conclusion,for the sake of the health safety in the society,which is mostly contributed by climate change brought about by pollution,it will be crucial to barricade private automobiles from cities.The disadvantages can be managed without so many consequences especially time factors
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