Some people say that in order to be happy, you must have a job you love doing. Other say other factors are more important. Do you think that people can only be happy if they have a job they really enjoy?

There is no doubt that a large
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of people believe that in order to be happy, you must have a
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important factors that we can take into consideration
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I will explore both sides of these arguments, and explain my support for
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view. To being with, those who support the
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the things we like and make us happy. A
job
is something we are supposed to do during most of our lifespan.
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us
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will affect our mood during the rest of the day. Another reason
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is that if we feel good
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our
job
, our efficiency will improve.
Consequently
, the chances of getting a promotion too.
On the other hand
, there are other factors to be taken into consideration. Every person is different, with particulars problems and needs. As a consequence, I don t think that only a
job
can make us happy,
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happiness, while for others
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money or love. During our lives
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our necessities may change
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it will too.
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conclusion despite the fact both arguments have good reasons, I believe that in order to achieve happiness,
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needs to
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that particular need or expectation in their lives. From my point of view, having a
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important,
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it isn’t the only key
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happiness. We need a certain combination of these factors to achieve it.
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