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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.

#people #attention
It is sometimes argued that advertising
have
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significant
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 impact on consumers decisions,
In
contrast
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 some
people
 believe, due to the growth of advertisements we do not really care about them
any more
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. While advertisements could help companies to introduce their products and
services
, personally, I think commercials are not effective
any more
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. On the one hand, The impact of advertising can not be ignored in many cases. Some
people
not
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do not
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 tend to buy
an
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unknown products or
services
.
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these days advertising get really seriously by companies, in the way that about
one
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third
 of every single
products
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 back to commercial expenses.
On the other hand
, it is obvious that quality is the most important aspect of a
product
, even with good and immediacy commercials,
an inadequate goods
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, foods or
services
 will quickly
forgot
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 by buyers,
however
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 a
high quality
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product
, but not famous will be known by a wide range of consumers soon.
Also
 shopping and retails
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 affected by social media and the Internet. Nowadays, a sheer volume of comments about goods and
services
 are shared by consumers.
People
 share their opinions and or even recommend something better. I personally use
this
 way.
This
 method helps me to choose the best
product
 without being affected by different ads, I just simply reviews the comments on a specific
product
 and
then
 I will decide whether should I buy it or not. In conclusion, advertisements can be successful in
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people
 to purchase goods and
services
, or they can be unsuccessful in many ways.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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