Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.

It is sometimes argued that advertising
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impact on consumers decisions,
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some
people
believe, due to the growth of advertisements we do not really care about them
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. While advertisements could help companies to introduce their products and
services
, personally, I think commercials are not effective
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. On the one hand, The impact of advertising can not be ignored in many cases. Some
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tend to buy
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unknown products or
services
.
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these days advertising get really seriously by companies, in the way that about
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third
of every single
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back to commercial expenses.
On the other hand
, it is obvious that quality is the most important aspect of a
product
, even with good and immediacy commercials,
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, foods or
services
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by buyers,
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a
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product
, but not famous will be known by a wide range of consumers soon.
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shopping and retails
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affected by social media and the Internet. Nowadays, a sheer volume of comments about goods and
services
are shared by consumers.
People
share their opinions and or even recommend something better. I personally use
this
way.
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method helps me to choose the best
product
without being affected by different ads, I just simply reviews the comments on a specific
product
and
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I will decide whether should I buy it or not. In conclusion, advertisements can be successful in
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people
to purchase goods and
services
, or they can be unsuccessful in many ways.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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