Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology

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part of these days whereas many people considered that the education seekers of the professional institutions should choose streamlines according to their interest while others have
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that learners should
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to study
science
and
technology related
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subject matters which will become beneficial for them in future. I subscribe to the view that
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should be given complete liberty to select the subjects they have interested in.Both the views will be discussed in
this
essay On the
one
hand, there are numerous reasons why tertiary students ought to study subjects that they want to explore and the most compelling reason is that choosing learning material on their behalf
also
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attain brilliant performance in their academics . By site example of
one
of my
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named Navneet,
instead
of selecting medical
science
and polytechnic,she used to examine law and now she is an advocate who is satisfying with her job as well as gaining
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income. Along with
this
to gather knowledge about streams
also
reduce mental stress which contributes to
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both physical as well as mental health of an individual.
On the other hand
, according to others mindset, by permitting
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to study only to have technical and
science
streams conducive to work in companies who only granted the employees with
science
and
technology
background
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instance,orientation
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conducted by various companies
also
contain questions related to
science
and
technology
by which it is concluded that these two are the major aspects .
Besides
this
, these two fields
such
as
science
and
technology
are helpful in our daily life too
For example
,with having knowledge about
science
, a person can know to identify the alterations in health and
also
recognize the symptoms of diseases as well as some precautions to prevent the ailments and if an individual can know about
technology
,
one
can easily
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the problem with technical gadgets. To conclude, along with
science
and
technology
, learners should
also
be allowed to choose their learning aspects on their
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behalf
which make their fundamental strong for a successful future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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