In many developing countries, there is an increasing movement of workers from rural areas into the cities. Why do you think this happens? What problems can this cause?

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fact
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a fact
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that
people
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mobilise
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move
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from villages to city areas in many developing countries.There are several reasons for
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situation. Why
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happens will be discussed
further
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. Examining the reasons for
people
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are moving from one
area
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of rural
to
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area to
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other
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another
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areas of urban, the most common cause of
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happening is for the betterment of their
life
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lives
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.
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is because one can not able to fulfil the basic
need
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needs
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of
family
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a family
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by staying in the
countryside
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countryside,
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as there is less employment
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, and
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he
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one
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would not
able
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be able
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to
counter
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meet
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the requirements of relatives.
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, one can be educated as an engineer ,
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but he
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does not have proper opportunities in his hometown.So, he has to change his living place for the future.  Another cause is the health care system.
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is mean
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means
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that in
villages
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villages,
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there are some hospitals
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, but
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for advanced technology or high-level
diseases
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diseases,
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only cure in big cities
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, and
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some
people
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do not want to travel every day for
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their
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disease therapy at the reputed hospital, that's why
he
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they
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opts
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to start in the near
area
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to
hospital
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a hospital
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where
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they
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could
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have
quicker
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a quicker
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response to
his
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their
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problems.
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,
a
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if a
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person has
cancer
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cancer,
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then
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he would definitely have to follow
1
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a 1
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-2 year course to cure it
and
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, and
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this
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would be difficult to travel 1-2
year
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years
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from home town to
urban
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an urban
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area
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.
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, he definitely decides to move there rather than having
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kind of problem
of
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with
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transportation.
To conclude
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, it can be
finally
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commented that there are many causes why
people
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transfer from rural
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area
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areas
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to urban
side
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areas
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for
future
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the future
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as well as
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good health care facilities for their life.

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Task response
Make a simple plan first: one line to answer the question, then two ideas with quick examples, then a short wrap up.
Coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to show how you link ideas, like 'also', 'but', 'so', 'for example'.
Grammar
Fix small grammar and spell mistakes. Use short, clear sentences.
Structure
The essay has a start and an end, and it talks about two main ideas.
Content
There are examples to show the point.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • move
  • move to
  • rural
  • city
  • urban
  • job
  • jobs
  • work
  • pay
  • money
  • education
  • school
  • training
  • skill
  • health
  • health care
  • hospital
  • transport
  • road
  • train
  • bus
  • housing
  • home
  • rent
  • crowding
  • overcrowding
  • traffic
  • pollution
  • noise
  • stress
  • unemployment
  • unemployed
  • farming
  • farm
  • harvest
  • drought
  • weather
  • climate
  • service
  • services
  • government
  • policy
  • plan
  • development
  • industry
  • factory
  • brain drain
  • youth
  • young
  • family
  • relatives
  • remittance
  • send money
  • village
  • country side
  • city life
  • city centre
  • rural area
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