We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we he more auspicious of their benefits?

Nowadays, we hardly can be separated from technologies. I believe that technologies development would continue to the point that human’s involvement
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some kind of works become minimal. Almost all of our activities require
machineries
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machinery
types of machinery
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such
as
computer
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a computer
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or
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mobile phone
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mobile-phone
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. With the help of
such
machines, things turn to be easier.
This
essay will highlight both the benefit and
drawback
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drawbacks
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of
dependence
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technologies,
espesially
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especially
computers.
To begin
with, the main benefit of
compurization
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computerization
communication
is that some works become easier,
hence
, reducing worker’s
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work load
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.
For instance
, hospitals require patients’ medical history to assess their health better. With
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from
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a computer
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computer
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computers
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, they could save numerous
datas
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data
dates
and could always be accessed instantly.
This
is a great achievement compared to bookkeeping or other manual
archieving
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archiving
achieving
that are tedious and require a
lot
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manpowers
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.
However
, one possible drawback of
such
convenience is that
human
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are no longer needed for certain works,
thus
, the high number of downsizing turnover.
For example
,
self check-in
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machines in the airport are a common thing in recent days.
Therefore
, employees who work in check-in boots are reduced.
This
kind of development gives advantages to the airport management as they
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less for employees’ salary, but become
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for the employees who lost their job.
Additionally
, computerization is vulnerable to be hacked that sometimes, the classified data could be accessed by an outsider.
Hence
, firewall securities
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essentials for
this
kind of job. To conclude, computers make life convenient in many ways, so it is apparent that they would continue to become part of our life. After
thorough
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analysis of
this
subject, I recommend people to embrace
this
technological development while
simultanously
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simultaneously
upgrading our self so that our values as
human
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being are not lost.
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