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Governments should ban smoking in public places , even though this would restrict some other people's freedom . Do you agree or disagree?

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The authorities are required to impose rules and regulations on public smoking in public places since smoking is injurious to health and
it
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does not limit the privilege of other people. I completely agree with the above notion and the following paragraph will substantiate my perspective.
To begin
 with, the effect of smoking can kill anyone.
In other words
, smoking not only damages the lungs of the smoker but
also
 produces irreversible injury to the person who inhales the smoke generated from cigarettes.
Furthermore
, there are numerous types of cancers which are originating from cigarette smoking because the basic ingredient in cigarettes is tobacco which is carcinogenic in nature leading to carcinoma formation
such
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as lung
cancer
 and oral
cancer
 are types of
cancer
 that are
life threatening
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.
For instance
, according to the Yale University report, about 30% of South
Asian
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Asians
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 suffer from oral
cancer
 due to cigarette smoking.
Hence
, it is devastating the
life
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 of all
the
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individuals.
Moreover
, in public
places
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 there are some pupils who are allergic to the smoke generated from the cigar.
Consequently
, there are chances of
asthma
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an asthma
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attack
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 for those who are already struggling to breathe in oxygen. 31st May is celebrated as “No Tobacco Day” all over the world. For illustration, China is one
such
 country where smoking is strictly prohibited and if anyone tries to rule out the same
then
 local authorities undertake the person for
further
 consideration.
Therefore
, tobacco is poisonous
for
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 our health. To conclude, I firmly believe that the government should ban smoking for the national population’s health and
international
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 environment. Even though
this
 may place a restriction on one’s freedom, the merits of
this
 are far higher than demerit.
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