Some people think that individuals today are more dependent on each other. Others believe people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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different views about individuals
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more or less dependent on each other nowadays. In my
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us to be independent than
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generation. There are two main reasons why it could be argued that
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are more dependent on
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, life became more complex and difficult because the living cost is increased dramatically.
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, young adults tend to rely on their parents for help to buy a new house. The property cost is high in
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and many impossible to pay deposit and
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,
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seem to be more ambitious and they want quality of life for their families. To achieve
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both parents have to work and earn full time and they are dependent on
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grand parents
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and
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for their child care.
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, I would agree with
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we are independent these days. In
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of
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families became smaller and dispersed.
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cannot count on relatives as they used to do it. We have more freedom and stay away from our local town. Students are going outside to complete their study and it made them more independent to do the things alone.
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we can work these days from
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and earn without depending on
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. To recapitulate , some of them are thinking individuals are dependent on
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. In my
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we are independent
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advanced technology world
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  • independence
  • dependency
  • specialization
  • professional services
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  • self-reliance
  • collective action
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