Crime appear to be rising in most countries in the word, especially among young people. Identify the possible cause of this trend, and propose some solutions you think would be effective.
These days, main causes. More detection
crime
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be occurred
in both developed and developing countries, andWrong verb form
occur
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apply
also
criminals may tend to be younger than ever before. Linking Words
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crime
and suggest three possible Use synonyms
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. Perhaps, the major factor here is Change to a plural noun
solutions
education
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prevent from doing
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preventing
crime
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education
curriculum. Add an article
the education
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almost warns students may commit petty Add a missing verb
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crime
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are
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opening
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opens
in
to more serious crimes later on. Another factor may be Change preposition
apply
macro economic
crises that Correct your spelling
macroeconomic
influenced
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influence
on
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apply
family
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the family
budget
and standard of living. Fix the agreement mistake
budgets
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decreasing revenue contributes people toLinking Words
commit
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committing
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crime
for their living costs and even just Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
surviving
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parents
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decreasing
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attending
crime
, especially in poor countries. The Use synonyms
times
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the
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apply
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do
received
adequate favor Wrong verb form
receive
by
their Change preposition
from
parents
and Use synonyms
care-taker
. Turning to possible solutions, there should be more CCTV cameras and policies in the streets, and these have Correct your spelling
caretakers
effect
on some thefts and robberies people commit. A second remedy is that Add an article
an effect
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Education
minister should add study programs about violence and vandalism in primary Correct article usage
the Education
school
. If Fix the agreement mistake
schools
such
courses were more available, it would reduce the Linking Words
crime
action to some extent. Use synonyms
Finally
, Linking Words
parents
should increase their child-care and use some GPS technology that reveals children to avoid doing truancy. In conclusion, the factors of Use synonyms
luck
of Correct your spelling
lack
education
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parents
care appear to beChange noun form
parents'
parent's
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the
camera
, curriculum and modern technology would lessen the severity of the situation.Fix the agreement mistake
cameras
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite