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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. what are advantage and disadvantage for both individual and companies to shopping online?

#people #advantage #companies
People
 are often
puchasing
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purchasing
products
through
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online these days because of easy shopping and to get satisfied with the desired needs and comforts.
However
,
i
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 believe that there are some strategies with online shopping. In
this
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i
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 will discuss the benefits and drawbacks that are increasing for both
product
owner
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owners
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 and
customer
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customers
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 buying online. On the
one
 hand,these days
people
 are getting craze about the
products
 advertised
in
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online.
Firstly
,buyers are using these
opportunity
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 to utilize purchasing the
product
through
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online because to satisfy their wants and needs .
Secondly
,strategies by different companies attract more
people
 to buy the
products
in
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online 24/7.
For instance
,
satisfaction
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 of customers buying easy shopping
by
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online without going to the mall and getting desired
products
.
Finally
,buying online has become a priority
to
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 all ages in
present
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 situation because sitting in
one
 place and getting a
product
 to your place is
the
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one
 of the foremost criteria
to
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 younger to older generations. Admittedly,others believe that playing marketing strategies has become a part of
play
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 to big companies.
However
,
this
 is
one
 of the crucial
part
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 of making money
through
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online.
Furthermore
,they are cheating sites in which they making money by giving wrong information by creating fake accounts
in
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online.
For instance
, customers are getting cheated by giving their bank account details
in
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online and making payments
in
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online to get their desired
products
. All in all, easy shopping has become
important
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 part
to
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 every being.
However
,
people
 need to find to
out right
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outright
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 site and do online shopping to get avoided from cheaters
in
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the
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product
 marketing.
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