The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
The pie charts show the difference between France and Australia
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production
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the production
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of electricity in 1980 and 2000. In Australia in 1980, the production of Coal was the highest
for
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50
units
while
Oil
was the lowest
for
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10
units
. Hydro
Power
and Natural Gas are the same for 20
units
. Coal remained at top production in 2000 for 130
units
whilst
Oil
and Natural gas
were
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2
units
. Hydro
Power
was relatively high for 36
units
. Nuclear
Power
in France in 1980 was 15
units
and it significantly reached 126
units
in 2000. The consumption of
Oil
and Natural Gas in 1980
were
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the same
as
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25
units
but in 2000,
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the data
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of
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Coal was the same with
Oil
for
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25
units
. Data of Hydro
Power
and Natural
Power
fell. The total unit
of
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Australia in 1980 and 2000 was 100 and 170
units
and in France was 90 and 180
units
.
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  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
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