The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
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the production

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of electricity in 1980 and 2000. In Australia in 1980, the production of Coal was the highest
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Oil
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was the lowest
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10
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. Hydro
Power
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and Natural Gas are the same for 20
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. Coal remained at top production in 2000 for 130
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whilst
Oil
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and Natural gas
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2
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. Hydro
Power
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was relatively high for 36
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. Nuclear
Power
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in France in 1980 was 15
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and it significantly reached 126
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in 2000. The consumption of
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and Natural Gas in 1980
were
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the same
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25
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but in 2000,
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of
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Coal was the same with
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for
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. Data of Hydro
Power
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and Natural
Power
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fell. The total unit
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Australia in 1980 and 2000 was 100 and 170
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and in France was 90 and 180
units
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words units, oil, power with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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