Some people believe that all wild animals should be protected. Others say that few wild animals should be protected instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is argued that the
protection
of a small number of wild animals
is important
to consider than protecting all of the wild Correct quantifier usage
more important
animals
. I completely agree with this
view. I strongly believe that protecting a small number of animals
is good for some animals
, but not suitable for all wild animals
. This
essay will firstly
discuss, how only a few wild animals
need protection
. Secondly
, this
essay will discuss why not all animals
need protection
.
On the one hand, some animals
could not survive in certain conditions
during their lifetime. For instance
, polar bears are being negatively affected by the
global warming Correct article usage
apply
that is
on the rise. Despite the freezing conditions
in the arctic region, the lakes are not being frozen enough in the summer so polar bears can walk on the lakes and catch fish to eat. Therefore
, the survival of polar bears is now dependent on weather conditions
. Hence
, those animals
nowadays need protection
for survival.
On the other hand
, most wild animals
do not need shelter because they cannot survive in protected environments. For example
, monkeys need a spacious environment to eat fruits and ants from trees. In addition
, monkeys are raised by their mothers to hang from tree to tree and not be forced to stay in a large room. Although
, no matter how large the room is, it could never Correct word choice
However
equals
the forest that they live in.
In conclusion, some wild Correct subject-verb agreement
equal
animals
are being threatened by today’s weather conditions
that
a shelter is Correct word choice
and
a need
for them to survive. Wrong verb form
needed
While most
Correct word choice
Most
of
Change preposition
apply
the
wild Correct article usage
apply
animals
will never stand a
protected shelter in a building. In my personal opinion, only a small number of wild Change preposition
in a
animals
should be protected, but certainly not all of them.Submitted by zainaabbara99 on
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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that ideas are logically linked throughout the essay. Use transition words to connect ideas and create coherence.
task achievement
Provide a more detailed and balanced discussion of both views. Ensure that examples are relevant to the discussion and support the main points effectively. Use clear reasoning and evidence to fully address the task question.