Some people believe that all wild animals should be protected. Others say that few wild animals should be protected instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is argued that the
protection
of a small number of wild Use synonyms
animals
is Use synonyms
important
to consider than protecting all of the wild Correct quantifier usage
more important
animals
. I completely agree with Use synonyms
this
view. I strongly believe that protecting a small number of Linking Words
animals
is good for some Use synonyms
animals
, but not suitable for all wild Use synonyms
animals
. Use synonyms
This
essay will Linking Words
firstly
discuss, how only a few wild Linking Words
animals
need Use synonyms
protection
. Use synonyms
Secondly
, Linking Words
this
essay will discuss why not all Linking Words
animals
need Use synonyms
protection
.
On the one hand, some Use synonyms
animals
could not survive in certain Use synonyms
conditions
during their lifetime. Use synonyms
For instance
, polar bears are being negatively affected by Linking Words
the
global warming Correct article usage
apply
that is
on the rise. Despite the freezing Linking Words
conditions
in the arctic region, the lakes are not being frozen enough in the summer so polar bears can walk on the lakes and catch fish to eat. Use synonyms
Therefore
, the survival of polar bears is now dependent on weather Linking Words
conditions
. Use synonyms
Hence
, those Linking Words
animals
nowadays need Use synonyms
protection
for survival.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, most wild Linking Words
animals
do not need shelter because they cannot survive in protected environments. Use synonyms
For example
, monkeys need a spacious environment to eat fruits and ants from trees. Linking Words
In addition
, monkeys are raised by their mothers to hang from tree to tree and not be forced to stay in a large room. Linking Words
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Although
, no matter how large the room is, it could never Correct word choice
However
equals
the forest that they live in.
In conclusion, some wild Correct subject-verb agreement
equal
animals
are being threatened by today’s weather Use synonyms
conditions
Use synonyms
that
a shelter is Correct word choice
and
a need
for them to survive. Wrong verb form
needed
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While most
Correct word choice
Most
of
Change preposition
apply
the
wild Correct article usage
apply
animals
will never standUse synonyms
a
protected shelter in a building. In my personal opinion, only a small number of wild Change preposition
in a
animals
should be protected, but certainly not all of them.Use synonyms
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task achievement
Provide a more detailed and balanced discussion of both views. Ensure that examples are relevant to the discussion and support the main points effectively. Use clear reasoning and evidence to fully address the task question.