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Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban area. The advantage outweigh the disadvantage?

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With the industrial revolution, the number of
companies
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 and
industries
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 keep on growing in
cities
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. Some feel that if these organizations shift to regional
areas
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then
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 there can be more area for the development of regional
areas
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.
This
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 essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
this
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 concern. On one hand, with more and more
companies
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 being established in urban
areas
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, people are migrating from small towns to
cities
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 in search of employment.
As a result
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 of
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, the
cities
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 are getting crowded day by day and pollution levels are increasing. If the government is able to shift some
companies
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 and
industries
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 to rural
areas
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,
then
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 the migrations to
cities
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 will stop and people will find employment in their regions.
Moreover
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,
this
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 transformation even helps in the expansion and development of regional
areas
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.
On the other hand
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, there is a rising concern that these
industries
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 and
companies
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 may take away the essence of the regional
areas
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. When we establish
industries
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 in these
areas
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, the waste from these
industries
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 pollutes the land and water of the regional
areas
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. In most villages the main occupation of people would be agriculture, with pollution levels rising, it adversely affects the vegetation from the crops.
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, with the continuous emission of harmful materials from
industries
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, the land here becomes damp and cannot be used for farming in coming generations. To conclude, even though there are advantages of establishing
industries
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 in villages, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages as pollution levels keep rising in the regional
areas
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. So
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 migration of
industries
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 to rural
areas
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 should not happen.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic development
  • urban congestion
  • infrastructure
  • pollution reduction
  • quality of life
  • production costs
  • environmental degradation
  • balanced economic development
  • regional areas
  • resource access
  • local economies
  • traffic congestion
  • pressure on housing
  • community investment
  • industrial growth
  • living standards
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