parents should spend more time with their children by helping them doing their assignment. agree or disagree?

As far as I
concerned
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,
parents
shouldn'
t
spend too much time
to help
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their
children
to do their assignments.
First
of all , assignments are used to improve
children
's
ablility
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ability
and knowledge.
For instance
,course
homeworks
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homework
can help
children
remember the knowledge which their teachers taught them in the classroom. Group activities can even cause your
children
to have more
charactries
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characters
which include ambition, responsibility and figure out problems by themselves.
Otherwise
, if
parents
help them to finish their
assignment
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. I think it can
casue
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cause
a bad influence
to
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them. When these kids faced some trouble which they can'
t
handle
it
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apply
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easily. They
maybe
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ask
parents
to help them
firstly
rather than to think out a good way to handle it. By the way,
children
need to develop independence when they are young. As well known, each famous person always can figure out problems by themselves when they
at
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a young age.
Parents
can'
t
accompany their
children
forever, they often pass away
ealier
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earlier
than their
kid
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kids
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. I heard a terrible true story
long
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a long
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time ago. A fabulous
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mother
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monther
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mother
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loved her young kid so that she took care of her kid very well until she
dead
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. She gave her child all the best things that she could provide.
However
, after
this
awesome mother
dead
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a while , her "lucky" child
also
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dead. The fact is
this
boy even can'
t
eat food by himself. All of us want to ask for help when we are in trouble, especially
children
.
Then
, their
parents
will think their
children
are too young to deal with
this
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problems.The most important character for
child
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a child
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is
independcy
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independency
independent
independence
.
Therefore
, I call for every
parents
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parent
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to let their
children
finish assignments by themselves.You will be
pround
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proud
of your
children
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental involvement
  • academic achievement
  • cognitive development
  • emotional bonding
  • supportive learning environment
  • skill enhancement
  • time management
  • holistic development
  • constructive feedback
  • behavioral patterns
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