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in some countries a few people earn extremely high salaries. some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn.

#countries #people #salaries #country #government #control #limit #amount
To start with, it is evident that professionals and other working class in a
country
 provide a major portion of economic boost in a
country
.
However
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 I believe that the
government
 in a
country
 should harness the imbalance between the
salary
 hike and dip. The economy of a
country
 depends on many things and the
salary
 of
employees
 is one among them. Though it can boost up the economy to a great extent, the over
salary
 hike of some professionals are not acceptable and satisfactory. It will seriously damage the economy in many ways. for
an
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example, in
India
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 the imbalance between high and low
salary
employees
 are dramatically higher and as the
the
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reason, it affects
the
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society
 and people in a negative manner. Supporting the statement,
inflation
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 rate in India is
example
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which
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 is hiking day by day, along with the poor becomes
more poor
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 periodically. The
above mentioned
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deatiled
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detailed
 about the role of
Government
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 and the concerned authorities and they should take collective actions to minimise the issues in
time
. In my view, the responsible
government
 department should present new bills in the parliament and the political parties should go along with
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 new amendment bills in a supportive way. the
responsibilities
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 to take timely plans are high
time
 in India, while the
employees
 can have
clear
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 understanding
about
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 the significance of these new changes in
the
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society
. Being
smart
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 and productive employee is a boon in a corporate
society
.
on the other hand
, realising the situation of a
country
 and
adaptive
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with
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 it is highly recommendable. in my strong statement, I believe it is high
time
 to implement bills in the parliament in regards
with
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the
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salary
 inequality and at the same
time
, it is the duty of the
government
 should make
employees
 knowledgeable about the economic situation of the
country
. To put it in a nutshell, the points described in the essay reflect the need of
the
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modern
society
 and people to become proactive adaptive and knowledgeable
with
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 the changes in
the
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society
. The essay detailed
about
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the effect of
salary
 imbalance in
the
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society
 and it and its high
time
 for a wake call for the authorities to take timely action plans. The more efficient the
government
 becomes to our the
employees
 with the
salary
 issues, the more issues can be resolved in
this
 regard.
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