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More and more people use private cars instead of taking the public transport. what are the reasons for this rising Trend ? what can be done to encourage people to use public transport?

#people #cars #transport #trend
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In modern society, the mode of individual use of
cars
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are
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 increasing. at the same
time
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people
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 lost their trust
on
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in
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 public
vehicles
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. in
this
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essay
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 I will explain the major causes of the statement and some of the
provision
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 for improving public
transportation
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.
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, rising population creates
increasing
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an increasing
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number
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 of
vehicles
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 because it helps to meet the needs of
people
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. admittedly now everyone can buy private
cars
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 with
installment
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 payment.
this
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 is more convenient and less expensive for a
middle class
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 family to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their dreams
on
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of
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 travelling. while doing professional
jobs
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, young generation
travel
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 a lot for meeting their task. so using
personal
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a personal
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 car is more convenient and adaptable for employees to make their career development. to illustrate
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, in
UK
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 some areas of
jobs
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 need
driving
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a driving
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 licence and personal mode of travelling especially like social work professionals and marketing
jobs
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.
however
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, if the applicant cannot meet
this
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 provision, they will not get any
jobs
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 related to
this
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 field. Apparently,
increasing
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number
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 of
vehicles
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 create pollution, audience and traffic difficulties in our society. government should implement more accurate policies for
public
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the public
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transportation
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 system.
firstly
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, they have to introduce more
vehicles
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 according to the needs of
people
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.
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secondly
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 it should be generated through low travelling payment, more seats for
disabled
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a disabled
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 person or elderly
people
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.
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, all these arrangements need to follow punctuality and good customer service.
for example
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, in 2011 Central Government conducted a survey related to the increasing
number
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 of
cars
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. reportedly, study findings suggested that
people
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 working in night time mostly by private vehicle because
majority
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the majority
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 of them not satisfied with the service of public
transportation
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 during their work hours. In conclusion, there is a saying a bird without wings,
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similarly
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people
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 cannot live without any mode of modern
transportation
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 because we are
depended
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 upon them. but
increasing
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an increasing
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number
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 of
cars
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result
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inresult
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 various environmental problems so government should ensure more reliable public transportations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Flexibility
  • Direct travel
  • Schedules
  • Routes
  • Comfort
  • Privacy
  • Personal space
  • Perceived safety
  • Health concerns
  • Public transport systems
  • Reliability
  • Frequency
  • Infrastructure
  • Accessible
  • Environmental awareness
  • Incentives
  • Lower fares
  • Tax benefits
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