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Many people today are worried about ‘cybercrime’ such as hacking and identity theft. What problems does ‘cybercrime’ cause, and what solutions can you suggest for ordinary people and businesses to take?

#people #‘cybercrime’ #identity #theft #businesses
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There is no doubt, that the
number
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 of cybercrimes has been constantly rising over the
last
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 decade. The most obvious reason for
this
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 phenomenon is
severe
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 deficiency of secure software in comparison with malicious soft. In
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essay
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 I would like to discuss some outcomes and solutions for
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 issue.
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 with, while
IT-specialists
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IT specialists
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 unsuccessfully
atepmt
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attempt
 to catch up
hackers
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with hackers
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, ordinary users
scarely
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scarcely
securely
 take benefits from existing software due to
IT-illiteracy
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IT illiteracy
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. Individuals browse suspicious
web-sites
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websites
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 and receive unsolicited messages without realizing probable consequences.
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, they provide hackers with
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acces
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access
 to personal
data
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,
such
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 as name, bank account
number
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 or even chattings.
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, victims of cybercrimes often face
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psychological
abusement
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,
such
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 as cyber
bulling
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bullying
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 or exploitation. As for corporations, the main reason for being endangered is an increased
number
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 of persons with
an
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apply
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acces
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access
 to corporation's
data
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. Particularly, each corporation with remote branches has to use
share
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 servers, and each computer with an authorized
acces
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access
 can be crashed.
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, a remarkable
ammount
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amount
 of
data
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thefs
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theft
thefts
 occurs due to improper usage of official gadgets. Overall, some steps
shoud
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should
 be implemented in order to manage more relevant security politics.
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,
goverments
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governments
government
 should shift theirs focuses onto
development
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 of
legal
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a legal
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framework
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frameworks
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 in cyberspace.Some kind of management authority in
privacy
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also
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 might be created. Clear terms of investigations and
conprehensible
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comprehensible
comprehensive
 punishment politics would trigger a
sustaintial
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substantial
 decline in cybercrime. Another
one
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measure would be reinforcing
of
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apply
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privacy
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 politics among corporations.
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, each employee who receives
an
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access to
corporation's
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a corporation's
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data
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 should be scrupulously testified in
cyber security
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cybersecurity
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 knowledge and skills.
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, a prohibition
ro
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to
 use official gadgets for personal purposes might
also
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 reduce
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number
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 of random
data
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 thefts. To conclude, I would say, that despite various causes for cybercrime,
such
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 measures, as creating
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privacy
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a privacy
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 policy and reconsideration of
privacy
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 rules for users, might be highly effective in both categories.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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