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Some believe that people are naturally born as leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is under question that leadership ability is either innate or nurtured. Some
people
 believe that it is only natural talent while others hold the opposite side that it can be learned. In my opinion,
people
 can develop these
skills
 thanks to learning and working progress and
this
 essay will focus on
this
 issue.
First
 of all, it is undeniable that there are many children born with superior abilities that can allow them to become talented
leaders
.
Leaders
 are usually charismatic, confident and persuasive, without these things, it is very difficult to be an inspirational and leading person.
For instance
, a salesman who often fails to persuade customers to sign contracts or make purchases have little chance of becoming a team leader or higher positions.
This
 failure shows that the ability to make others trust and feel convinced of them is very low.
However
, there are many
people
 who have demonstrated that leadership
skills
 are achieved through training and effort.
That is
 why there is a large number of courses are organized to help those who need to improve the
skills
 required to become successful
leaders
 as well as managers.
People
, especially those who are shy and lack convenience, can learn about public speaking
instead
 of good body language, pronunciation and so on and it will make them better
leaders
.
Besides
, needed
skills
such
 as how to communicate better, persuade others, be more confident and teamwork can
also
 be cultivated and practised. In conclusion,
although
 some of the factors related to leadership
such
 as attraction are innate, humans can still try to develop other
skills
 to compensate for our weaknesses. Thereby meeting the requirements to become a great leader .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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