fast food idustry is having negative effects on our health? Do you agree or disagree?

In
this
modern era,along with technical advancements,the
food
consumption is
also
getting advance as it
also
have
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affected our health and I
am completely agree
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with
this
statement
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therefore
I will provide reasons to justify my answer in the following paragraphs
To begin
with,fast
food
have
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deleterious
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effects
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affects
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effects
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on health as it originated many
health related
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problems in an individual
such
as from the
last
decade it is seen that more cases of obesity, heart
diseseas
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diseases
disease
are come across by consuming street
food
.Along with
this
,various ingredients
are use
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by the
food
makers which affect the economy of a nation
also
,to illustrates
this
,government spend a lot of
budget
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just to import
the
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artificial flavours from
the
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abroad which interrupts their incentives too.
Besides
,fast
food
suppliers
also
enhances
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the use and throw culture in a country,
for example
,more people usually taste the
food
and
rest
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of it
disposed
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off
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which is seen in various places which creates pollution.It
also
affects the
expensive
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of a person,
for instance
,due to
hectic
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schedule,most
of
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the
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people buy their meals from restaurants which seems to be much costlier than
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homemade
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home made
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food
and waste a valuable amount of their income on fast
food
. It is concluded that
,
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one should consume
food
from
food
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industry but
on
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small intervals so that it
do
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not have a major impact on an individual's body as it causes different kinds of ailments in human beings.
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