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Traffic and housing problems could be solved by moving large companies, factories and their to the countryside do you agree or disagree.

#traffic #companies #factories #countryside
In my opinion, traffic and house
realted
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related
 issues could be resolved by shifting large companies and factories to the countryside. I completely agree with
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 statement as by doing so,
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 it will be easier to control the
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 in a crowd level. The
first
 and foremost reasonable reason to increase in a crowd is many people travel daily to the work either by using their own vehicle or public transportation, which increases in traffic to a high level
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 during the peak hours.
This
 cause heavy congestion on a
raod
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road
.
This
 type of situation is dangerous sometimes. For
an
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example, if there is an emergency situation and, fire brigade or
ambulence
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ambulance
 get stuck
into
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 the
traffice
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traffic
, unable to reach
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the destination on time, it might cause a human loss.
Subsequently
, large companies and factories are accountable for air, water, noise and many other types of pollution. For
an
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example, chemical plants release hazardous chemicals, dangerous substances, elements that are very harmful
for
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the
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human's life. Another example, manufacturing plant may cause
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 level of noise which is very dangerous for
human
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 in order to hear
continously
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continuously
. It is not recommended to live around
such
 a hazardous situation. In conclusion, it is strongly agreed that having large factories and companies
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 the
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countryside
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country side
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 will resolve many issues simply, which is required for
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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.
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