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Some people think it´s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it´s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Having
friends
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 that share the same views is prefered by a portion of the population,
on the other
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hand
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 that are
people
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 that prefers some level of disagreement
on
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with
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 their
group
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 of
friends
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. In my
opinion
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,opinion
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 a
certin
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certain
amout
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amount
 of
diversity
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the diversity
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 of thought is healthy and contributes
for
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to
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 personal development. To interact with
people
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 that always agree and share the same opinions can be very
confortable
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comfortable
 and reassuring.
Usually
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that is
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 how a strong social
group
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 is formed. Great
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examples
 of these are political parties and religious groups.
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,
people
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 that think it is better to interact with
friends
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 that have the same opinions might have stronger beliefs and feel safer in a cohesive and
homogenious
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homogenous
homogeneous
group
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.
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, to interact and be
friends
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 with
people
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 that have different views and sometimes disagree is
usully
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usually
prefred
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preferred
 by
people
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 that have an open mind, that
are
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is
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 not as much as passionate about central values
such
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 as religion, and for that
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reason
reson
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 they might feel that being in a diverse
group
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 makes them better individuals. To conclude, I personally prefer to have
friends
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 that disagree sometimes. Because usually
this
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a
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sign that I am part of
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group
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a group
the group
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that is
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 inclusive,
that
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apply
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embraces different backgrounds and
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that
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apply
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is formed by individuals that enjoy a variety of activities and subjects.
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,
this
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 is the type of environment that I would like to grow and make
conections
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connections
. Being able to respect
diversity
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the diversity
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 of
oppinion
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opinion
 is an important skill and is central for a better world.
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