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the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

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The graph gives some data about the
amount
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 of questionnaires take by the Tourist Information Office in a city.
This
 information illustrates the results of 6 months in 2011. Overall, there are 3 types of questionnaires: in person, by
letter
 or
email
, by telephone. Generally, the high rate of the statistic belonged to the person,
in
contrast
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 the least level of index was by
letter
 or
email
. With regards to the
personally
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 and
letter
 or
email
, the index of the personally developed sharply almost more than 400 and the maximum level occurred in June with approximately just above 1800,
on the other
hand
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 the pointer of the
letter
 or
email
 dropped from almost just under 800 to closer 400,
in
addition
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 the shows of May and June were relatively similar. In terms of the telephone, the amount of January was just over 800,
nevertheless
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 the minimum show happened in February with 800. The pointers of March and April were closer with almost 1000.
Finally
, the maximum amount of the graph was shown with 1600 in June.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • in person
  • by letter/email
  • by telephone
  • general trend
  • six-month period
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • monthly data
  • comparison
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