Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It has been suggested that the topic for discussion, the
environment
can'
t
be developed or prevented by
individuals
,
in
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this
process is able to be enforced only governments and large
companies
. I don'
t
admit that
individuals
can'
t
affect
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the
environment
and there are some reasons.
First
of all, as a matter of fact, in
this
day and
age
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negative effects are being increased by
people
so there are some issues about the
environment
as pollution of the air, seas, lakes,
in
addition
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the decreasing of the oxygen. In fact, the rules had been illustrated in the legislation, what is more measures had tried to enforce by the
companies
,
nevertheless
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the statistic shows that
this
isn'
t
enough. I believe that
,
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everything commences from
individuals
,because those who manage the government,
companies
are
individuals
of society. As a
pattern
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if the
environment
is defended by the public, they needn'
t
have rules, fines, protective measures and so on. Briefly, my own view on
this
matter,
individuals
have got the bigger role than the government or
companies
, most of
people
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need have to get information about
this
topic as some
people
don'
t
understand own obligations, duties and others.
Secondly
, another factor
the
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protective measures of the government or
companies
aren'
t
permanent, because they can'
t
watch out every place so the enactments should be realized by the individual. As an example, they mustn'
t
pollute areas, sowing new trees, not throw rubbish and so on. To sum up,
people
mustn'
t
think that the country or massive
companies
have got special roles for the
environment
and they have to remember each person is
the
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member of the public,
environment
and they don'
t
prevent
this
process will affect both
people
's health and surroundings.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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