In many countries crime rates among teenagers are higher than among other age groups. What are the causes of this problem and what can be done to solve it?

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Increase in the rate of bad deeds among youths
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steadily increasing across the globe.
This
essay will discuss in the forthcoming paragraphs that how over-independence and getting huge pocket money are pushing them towards danger.
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, it will
also
suggest how the
parents
& adaptation of the counselling process could help in the resolution of
this
problem. Often, it is seen that young people are getting too much
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freedom as well as money.
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fact that, nowadays, both the
parents
are working.
Thus
, they lack time to spend quality time with their offspring.
Hence
, to compensate that they tend to give their own children independence as well as something to spend on their own needs.
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, my neighbour’s only son stayed alone the entire day at home. At the age of
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he was caught
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at his school while he was consuming drugs. To escape his teacher, he punched him badly on his face;
thus
, injuring him severely. Upon
further
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it was found that he was getting Rs 6000 every month from his mother and father that he started spending on consuming drugs.
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, appropriate attention from
parents
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well-being counselling could help in the reduction of
this
. If teenagers get more time from their family members they will stay back at home, and
parents
will not have to compensate them in
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ways
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. If
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adolescent is getting diverted from their daily life, we should immediately reach out to a proper psychologist who can treat them from an extremely early stage.
For instance
, various scientific papers elucidate that young boys and
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who have strong morale never get distracted from the path of positivity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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