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Each year, the crime rate increases. What do you think are the causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

#year #crime #rate #increases
The line graph compares the internet surfers as
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 of mass/ population in
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 , Canada and Mexico over a decade between 1999 and 2009. Overall, it can be clearly seen from the graph that Canada had
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 number amongst the
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. While
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 Mexico had the lowest number among the
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,
USA
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 came in the middle, by the end of the given period. Starting with Canada,
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 of users in 1999 was the lowest and it increased steadily up until 2005 when it slightly fell, and it continued
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 increase until it reached
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 peak in 2009.
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,
USA
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 stood at(…) in 1999 and, it kept it rose until 2003 when it hit a low.
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, 2007 witnessed a slight decrease and it remained the same till the end of the period in 2009.
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, Mexico
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 started the lowest amongst the
three
 nations in 1999. The numbers of the users increased gradually up until 2005 when it started to slightly fall and it remained constant at the same level in 2009. Which is less than
USA
 users by almost 50% .
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