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Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money, others argue that these are necessary for individuals. Discuss both views and give opinion.

#people #parties #celebrations #waste #money #individuals
According to some
people
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 festivals are important for human
life
 and some others argued that it will only
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in loosing
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loosing
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 money. In
this
essay
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 I will explain
pros
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 and cons of
this
 statement and I strongly
believes
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 that celebrations are more important in human
life
.
Moreover
, festivals are more convenient for today's busy
life
 because it makes
life
 more beautiful.
In addition
, it results
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family gathering,
culture
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 integrity and social recognition among human
being
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beings
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.
Although
,
city
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considered
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as
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the land of strangers
but
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community celebration makes a new system of adaptation among youngsters. To illustrate
this
, during the time of Holy festival (
oneof
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one of
of
 the major spiritual events in India) added colourful lights among
people
 without their class and cast.
In addition
,
this
 enjoyment of community
life
 created
a
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new meaning in social values.
However
, now parties
used
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are used
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 for social status or a symbol of extravagance that's distributed the gap between rich and poor in our society. Admittedly,
people
 borrow money from
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the bank
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bank
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banks
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 and they are spending
this
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these
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 resources for enjoying these events.
As a result
,many
people
 lost their happiness without realising the value of
life
 .In 2019,
government
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the government
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 of Kerala conducted a survey related to suicide death Reportedly, the result shows that
majority
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 of
this incident
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these incidents
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 occurred due to bankruptcy related to
marriage
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the marriage
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ceremony
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. In conclusion,
life
 is more valuable, that everyone needs to enjoy the moments of togetherness but we should keep
this
 happiness
long lasting
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 not just
distroying
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destroying
life
 with
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losing
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loosing
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losing
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 money.
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