many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and how health problems as a result why do so many working people not get enough exercise? what can be done about this problem?

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century man is
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to make
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money and they don't have any time to do physical
exercise
.
however
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this
leads to
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unhealthy changes in their lifestyle. in
this
essay, I will explain the various consequences of lack of physical
exercise
and suggestions related to the problem.
Moreover
, industrialisation brings enormous changes in the
life
of people and always create a competitive world.
in addition
to
this
, development
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by the standard of
life
, so people worked hard for getting more money from their work. admittedly, while meeting the task of their job, they do not get any time for physical activities. Apparently, more work means more stress that makes an imbalance with their professional and personal
life
.
as a result
, many employees now facing
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problems like high blood pressure, cholesterol and diabetics. to illustrate
this
, in 2018 Government of India conducted a health survey among professionals reportedly 75% of the research samples indicate lack of
exercise
and lifestyle diseases.
However
, human beings need proper physical and mental
exercise
for leading a healthy
life
.
firstly
, everyone
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a
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proper planning for their daily
life
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spend at least half an hour for any physical activities like yoga, cardio or meditation.
secondly
, industries and
multi millionaire
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companies do not give more stress on their works and they need to provide proper time scheduled for their work and
exercise
.
thirdly
, Government and welfare authorities should educate people
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the importance of healthy
life
because it is more beneficial for youngsters.
for example
, due to
new
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working policy of
Indian
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government, 60% of technical companies introduced weekly yoga and meditation
practice
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practices
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among their workers to reduce their stress and mental illness. In conclusion,
world
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is developing day by day but these changes cannot replace the value of human
life
. so we should respect our body, do
exercise
regularly and make sure that health is
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of
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life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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