many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and how health problems as a result why do so many working people not get enough exercise? what can be done about this problem?
In
21st
century man is Change the article
the 21st
more busy
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busier
to make
money and they don't have any time to do physical Change the verb form
making
exercise
. however
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,however
this
leads to an
unhealthy changes in their lifestyle. in Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
this
essay, I will explain the various consequences of lack of physical exercise
and suggestions related to the problem.
Moreover
, industrialisation brings enormous changes in the life
of people and always create a competitive world. in addition
to this
, development introduced
by the standard of Add a missing verb
was introduced
life
, so people worked hard for getting more money from their work. admittedly, while meeting the task of their job, they do not get any time for physical activities. Apparently, more work means more stress that makes an imbalance with their professional and personal life
. as a result
, many employees now facing healthy
problems like high blood pressure, cholesterol and diabetics. to illustrate Replace the word
health
this
, in 2018 Government of India conducted a health survey among professionals reportedly 75% of the research samples indicate lack of exercise
and lifestyle diseases.
However
, human beings need proper physical and mental exercise
for leading a healthy life
. firstly
, everyone hold
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holds
a
proper planning for their daily Remove the article
apply
life
and to
spend at least half an hour for any physical activities like yoga, cardio or meditation. Fix the infinitive
apply
secondly
, industries and multi millionaire
companies do not give more stress on their works and they need to provide proper time scheduled for their work and Add a hyphen
multi-millionaire
exercise
. thirdly
, Government and welfare authorities should educate people for
the importance of healthy Change preposition
about
life
because it is more beneficial for youngsters. for example
, due to new
working policy of Correct article usage
the new
Indian
government, 60% of technical companies introduced weekly yoga and meditation Correct article usage
the Indian
practice
among their workers to reduce their stress and mental illness.
In conclusion, Fix the agreement mistake
practices
world
is developing day by day but these changes cannot replace the value of human Add an article
the world
life
. so we should respect our body, do exercise
regularly and make sure that health is wealth
of Correct article usage
the wealth
your
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our
life
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