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the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.

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The graph gives some data about the per cent of people going to cinemas in a European country on various days.
In addition
, the graph was illustrated that in 3 various
years
(2003, 2005, 2007). Overall, units are measured in percentage. Probably, the statistics of 2003 and 2005
years
 outnumbered
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the other. The high rate indexes of every 3
years
 happened on Saturday, in ,contrast the least indexes were shown on Monday. With regards to the pointers of 2005 and 2007
years
, in general, the maximum per cent was appreciated with forty-five in every one hundred in 2005 on Saturday,
on the other hand
, the
least
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 show was introduced in 2007 with just under 10%. In terms of
2003
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 year, the maximum pointer of
2003
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 year occurred on Saturday with two-fifths of
people
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, in ,contrast the show was appreciated with ten in every one hundred on Monday.
Finally
, the percentage of Friday was the same with thirty in every one hundred
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