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government should invest more money in science education rather than other subjects to develop to the country. Do you agree or disagree?

#government #money #science #education #subjects #country
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Nowadays, some sections argue that
science
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 should be set as a priority to education
subjects
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 due to the contribution to the whole society in comparison with the others,
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 as music, arts and so on. It is true that
science
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 can bring us more convenient and high-quality lifestyles but I still do not agree about
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 statement and I think
people
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 should not ignore the equal importance of the other
subjects
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.
Science
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 education involving physics, mathematics and chemistry may take as the fundamental or bridge that connects with economy and technology directly. The cutting aged products and inventions normally need
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 kind of techniques to support in the developing countries. Because those acknowledge can fulfil their practical needs, more and more students and employees who would like to chose
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 kind of
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.
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, country
development
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 cannot only rely on
science
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 in the long-term consideration, because of the multifarious economic benefits and widen perspectives would be expanded by the other
subjects
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. Arts or literature
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 can bring huge profits and
development
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 and endless imagination to human beings to stimulating the economy as well as the great innovation.
Science
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 and other
subjects
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 should be equally important to the whole country. Without either will
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 impede individual
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 and
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 influence the
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 process. Human beings as the
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 productivity should be given the right to choose their interesting
subjects
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 rather than money-driven.
People
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 need to enrich their emotions by studying arts and enjoying music, which can lead to a positive attitude when they encounter tough times and
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 can energetic their passion to embracing work or studies. If only remain sciences studying those
people
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 who are full of imagination and sensitive emotion would be curbed and impair their efficiency and productivity. In conclusion,
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science
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 education has an unreplaced position in the country
development
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,
people
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 should not underestimate the equal function of other sciences. So
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 why I do not agree bout
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 kind of suggestion.
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