Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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lifestyle has resulted
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in a lot of unwanted
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. Ending a life before it is actually born has become quite common nowadays. While some people believe it should be allowed to kill
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life before its
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, others believe it should be restricted.
This
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essay will discuss
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my partial agreement on both statements with relevant examples.
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with, aborting any unwanted pregnancy is as common as treating any fever and it has been widely accepted by many people. Some believe that it should be legal to abort
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the fetus
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and I agree with the statement
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following
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resons
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reasons

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. If parents come to know about any deadly genetic or neurological conditions in
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the fetus

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which can risk
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of the mother as well as
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it is necessary to end that risk factor at the initial stage to avoid any
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complications.
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, in some
cases
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,cases

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babies are born with deadly conditions like
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in
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and those have very low chances of survival and have rare possibilities of
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treatment.
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, it is argued that abortion should be considered
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a
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illegal procedure. I agree with
this
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resons
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. In some communities of India, people still do not appreciate
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birth
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of a
girl
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child
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even after many
initiative
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taken
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of India to save
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. Many times, a
women
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has to go through multiple abortions just because she is carrying a
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child
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and sometimes it results
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death
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of the mother. Currently, we are living in a society
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provides equal opportunities to both men and women. So, it should equally support
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birth
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of a
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as well as a boy. In conclusion, for
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reasons, aborting a
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should be considered
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legal or illegal depending upon
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is growing with abnormalities
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can not be treated
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it should be allowed to abort
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to avoid any
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risks.
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, abortion on basis of gender detection should be banned and both
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girl
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as well as boy
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child
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should have equal rights.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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