The movement of people from agricultural areas to cities to work can cause serious problems in both places. What are the serious problems? What measures can be used to solve these problems?

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The migration of people from rural
areas
to urban
areas
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can cause
a serious issue in both
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the
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places.
This
essay will discuss the problems which will occur in both places and the possible solutions to overcome
this
problem. The two main serious drawbacks which will occur are
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overpopulation
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over population
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in urban
area's
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and less production of agricultural items. When humans move from agricultural
areas
to cities,
this
will lead to more
number of
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folks residing which will directly make that place densely populated over time.
For instance
, to attain certain
jobs
for high wages more folks will immigrate to that place which will cause
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overcrowding
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over crowding
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.
Also
, when they move out there will be less no of
peasents
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peasants
working in the farmland which will result in less
number
of growth of the vegetables and other farm products.
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,
less
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number
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of
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farmers working in the farmland will result in
less
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amount
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of veggies. Some possible solutions that can solve
this problems
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are that
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government
governmet
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should provide some nice opportunities for farmers to earn more money and there should be more
number of
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jobs
application available so that everyone can work according to their interests. authority should give good chances to earn more money.
Moreover
, by providing them with more
number
of
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job in that area as well which will directly boost their income.
whearas
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whereas
where
they should
also
proide
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provide
more
jobs
in village
areas
so they can have
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of
jobs
and everyone can
chose
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their
jobs
according to their
willwhich
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will which
will enhance their liking for the job. To conclude, immigration of folks from rural to urban
areas
can have
major
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side-effect
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on both the place.
However
, we can decline that moving of them by giving ample amount of opportunities through which they can earn more
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