Nowadays, parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed what is the reason for doing this? Is this a negative or positive development?

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the
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norms. In
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the given statement and I strongly support that pressurising students for study generate a negative impact on their development.
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for
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children
to learn.
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, now education
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as a status symbol in which, getting
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empowerment.
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employment
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made a stressful mind among
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children
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circumstances made the results of
parents
comparison on their
children
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less confidence and
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children
.
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in his research
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out that comparison decrease
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potentiality
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to study. Apparently, every child
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positive reinforcement
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their studies and it
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their learning capacity. To illustrate
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, Abraham Maslow ,one of the famous humanistic
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in the world suggested that punishment and compelling study destroy the natural learning ability of human life. Reportedly, when
parents
compelling their
children
, it will negatively influence their physical ability because tension makes the production of unwanted hormones in their body.
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,
parents
teach their
children
how to overcome difficulties in life and they need to support any challenging situation. In conclusion, every
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is unique and they have their own
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talents. As a parent, everyone should understand their
children
's ability and
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encourage them to succeed
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life happily.
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