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Ensuring that children have regular physical exercise should be the responsibility of parents and therefore schools should not waste valuable school time having sports lessons as part of the curriculum. To what extent do you agree?

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While some people argue children should have physical education at home by their
parents
, some other people believe that school should consider some
sport
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 classes for
students
 at school.
However
, I reckon
schools
 are a proper place for children to attend physical practices. On the one hand,
schools
 are a
suitabel
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suitable
 environment for pupils to examine their physical
health
 under
supervision
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 of
health
 experts and trained coaches.
Therefore
,
amature
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mature
amateur
students
 can be trained safely without taking the risk of injuries.
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Furthermore
, they can have interaction with other pupils which not only does
it
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improve their social skills but
also
 it boosts their competitive spirit.
On the other hand
, some families with
low-income
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low income
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 can't afford all the training equipment for their offspring.
Thus
, even if
parents
 had the
willing
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 to train their
kidds
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kids
 at home they would be disappointed to fulfil their
attemption
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attention
 because of economical matters. While educational institutes
such
 as
schools
 have provided free facilities for
this
 purpose irrespective of
students
' status or income levels.
Moreover
,
parents
 should encourage their kids to stay motivated during weekends and holidays.
For instance
, they can take them
to
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hiking
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 or fishing. To conclude, even though
parents
 can be effective in
child's
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a child's
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 physical
health
, I believe the majority of
this
 duty is upon
schools
 and academic environments.
Accordingly
, they can set regular
sport
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 classes in
students
' curriculum,
as a result
,
students
 would pursue physical educations regularly which boost their physical and mental
health
 simultaneously.
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